New
morning, new day. Time to hide feelings.
Time to
be happy for everyone.
See
friends and meet them with cheerful greetings.
This
curved tattoo of a smile, fake fun.
We sit
and laugh and gossip as always.
Total
opposites in and out body.
I’m
frightened they’ve caught me because they gaze.
I’m an
actress to please everybody.
This
blissful costume is consuming me.
My mood changes like tides in the ocean.
But the film is rolling, the cast can't see.
And want
me to drink a healing potion.
The bell
rings, I’m home. School’s finally done.
I run to
my safe haven, costume gone.
The title is real nice. This is a good poem, but IMO, "peeved" has got to go.
ReplyDeleteFor me, it's a poem-ruiner. It's too informal in an otherwise pretty serious poem.
I love "this blissful costume is consuming me." It's my favorite part.
But the next line "I want to show my true emotions" pales in comparison to the preceding line, so it should be strengthened.
Any suggestions?
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